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09 Sep 2023 00:00 #3033 by DanZilla

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09 Sep 2023 04:09 #3041 by Dreamer

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SPOILER ALERT
Below is a stream of conscious commentary I type up as I read the story. There will be details from the story included in it. If you have not read the story yet and don't wish to have details of it spoiled, read no further.

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Saturday, June 19, 1999,
Atlanta, Georgia.

Justin K. Boynton aka 'Ground Control' waiting for his bride-to-be to show up. Best man Paul E. Schmidt aka 'Mister Morphine'. Stephanie Herrgel aka 'Chercheuse' is the bridge to be. Aww, a guy who just wants her to be herself. How did they get an Exemplar like Justin into such a state?

Lakeshore Park, Knoxville, Tennessee.

Paul Schmidt, I don't like you, messing with people like this out of greed sickens me. Hugh Wilkins is in love with Bob Willingham and Bob is going to propose, how sweet. Georgie Fairman, ugh, this guy irks me. And now I know why I don't like Paul, an esper and part of the Masterminds Club when he went to Whateley, ugh.

Spring 2003,
Duke Medical Center, Durham, North Carolina.

Shifter's Dementia, nooo, not to a loving couple like this. This is one of the dangers of shapeshifting, which is horrifying. Justin trying to take in all the memories of Stephanie that he can in the time they have left.

Thursday, December 15, 2005,
Duke University, Durham, North Carolina.

So Justin is an Associate Professor at a college now. *bops Justin* You bonehead, you should have been making memories this whole time. Ugh, Paul and he refuses to not call Justin a nickname he hates, that isn't a good friend. *facepalms* And Paul dated multiple girls at the same time back at Whateley, what a sleeze.

Thursday afternoon, December 22, 2005,
Carrboro, North Carolina.

*eyes bug out* Okay, Paul needs to die, that is beyond scummy behavior to telepathic rape. What are you plotting, Paul? You implanted a trigger phrase and memory blank to forget it afterward, you are lower than pond scum. Thinking he is helping out Justin when he is simply manipulating him.

Friday evening, December 23, 2005,
Holiday Party, Boynton Residence.

Myra looks like Stephanie, she TA'd one of his classes and worked as his research assistant, uh oh. Memories are recorded straight from the neurons in the brain, Paul is right, the first time that is accepted in court as evidence the witness or inventor of such a device will be killed. Justin has a lot of plans for this invention, but it sounds dangerous either way.

April 2005
Duke Medical Center, Durham, North Carolina.

Justin is in rough shape and he asked Paul over for something, I have a bad feeling about this. Oh crap, Justin is this desperate, this isn't going to end well.

Late evening, November 15, 2006,
Carolinas Medical Center, Charlotte, North Carolina.

God, the toll working Search and Rescue has, even without the issues of her power could eventually break anyone. Blaming herself for not getting there sooner to save an old man. A squall causing that kind of damage, even with superpowers you can't save everyone from a natural disaster.

Early morning, November 16, 2006,
Motel 6, outskirts of Charlotte, North Carolina.

Crud, Stephanie knows how Paul has been helping Justin, how he is trying to figure out how to copy her mind to a clone. Ouch, all those things about force-grown clones, everything involved, no wonder it isn't used to save lives. Ouch, promise to find someone else for Justin to fall in love with all over again, Stephanie, that is easier said than done.

Early Thursday morning, November 16, 2006,
Fayetteville, North Carolina.

A tornado outbreak that spread that far, good lord. Died trying to save a family from an F3 tornado heading towards them, at least Stephanie died the way she wanted, as a hero. Buried next to her father in Atlanta, I didn't like Paul before but him being there for Justin right now improves my opinion a little.

Sunday, November 19, 2006,
Oakland Cemetery, Atlanta, Georgia.

Justin, you are still in shock, you can mourn when you are truly ready. Moving to Florida for a new job position and to protect his project from those who would target him over it. Ouch, needs Paul to help him into the right frame of mind to work. A shifter with a high degree of susceptibility to mental coercion, okay, I'm back to hating Paul. This was his plan all along, no morals at all.

A good, but painful story to read seeing Justin so desperate to save Stephanie, the issues Stephanie was having, and Paul there acting like the perfect friend when all along he is plotting to use an invention of Justin's for his own schemes. I hope somehow, someway that Justin figures out Paul before it is too late.

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09 Sep 2023 05:06 #3042 by null0trooper

Replied by null0trooper on topic Falling by Null0trooper

First, I'd like to thank you for taking the time to read over my short story!

Dreamer wrote:
How did they get an Exemplar like Justin into such a state?

Probably by rail, but Georgia's a pretty enough state at the right time of year for a drive!

Dreamer wrote:
What are you plotting, Paul? You implanted a trigger phrase and memory blank to forget it afterward, you are lower than pond scum. Thinking he is helping out Justin when he is simply manipulating him.

How often does the road to Hell start out paved with little white lies that we justify loudest to ourselves?

Dreamer wrote:
Myra looks like Stephanie, she TA'd one of his classes and worked as his research assistant, uh oh. Memories are recorded straight from the neurons in the brain, Paul is right, the first time that is accepted in court as evidence the witness or inventor of such a device will be killed. Justin has a lot of plans for this invention, but it sounds dangerous either way.

One of the problems posed any new technology or use of power is how dangerous its misuse, even well-intentioned misuse can be. Consider that all of a person's senses are filtered and interpreted through such memories. Change those, you change a person's entire world. You're a god.

Dreamer wrote:

Late evening, November 15, 2006,
Carolinas Medical Center, Charlotte, North Carolina.
God, the toll working Search and Rescue has, even without the issues of her power could eventually break anyone. Blaming herself for not getting there sooner to save an old man. A squall causing that kind of damage, even with superpowers you can't save everyone from a natural disaster.

The story is fictional. Unfortunately, the tornado outbreak of November 14–16, 2006, isn't.

Dreamer wrote:
A good, but painful story to read seeing Justin so desperate to save Stephanie, the issues Stephanie was having, and Paul there acting like the perfect friend when all along he is plotting to use an invention of Justin's for his own schemes. I hope somehow, someway that Justin figures out Paul before it is too late.

They were roommates and training teammates, Justin knows how Paul's powers work. What comes next is just enough success to make it more valuable to employ their diversifying services than to kill them and take their stuff.

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